Very good

"far away feelings" hits hard. especially with the sfx.

IMO the audio and the tone of voice sounded detached and devoid of sentiment for a poem about love and longing in content. Perhaps the intent was to idealize the sentiment/relationship and convey it was transcendent or ineffable? But to me the sentiment itself was missing, maybe it was too idealized, imo.

The use of vocabulary was eloquent, though, and the consonances and assonances helped create a pleasing effect. I also thought the vocabulary helped create an alienating effect alongside the audio, but again, not alongside the content.

I'd suggest changing the content to create an abstract experience or changing the audio/tone to convey more emotion. You could possibly add rhyme and/or meter if you'd lean to the romantic side, but I'd advise against if you'd go for the esoteric, I think lacking them (the way it is) helps with that.

Anyway, these are my thoughts.